Daelana Lei

Full Name: Daelana Lei
Gender: Female
Age: 12
Element: Water
Birthplace: Southern Water Tribe
Position: Student/ Child

Personality: A kind professional girl that doesn’t like to let feelings get in the way of her goals, even though usually that’s how it turns out. Emotional and caring for all friends and family, even the ones that she doesn’t necessarily always agree with.

Abilities: A new student only knows basic techniques of making water move in a bowl, not much more to say except a well… inexperienced character that could use some teaching in all forms of water bending and is not sure where she wants to go in the way of advanced techniques.

Appearance: She is 5’ even and only 90 lbs. which makes her a girl of very small stature that doesn’t have much of a chance at all to get much bigger, since her parents aren’t much bigger than her in the first place. Wears blue woolen robes not to shabby but not magnificent, mainly white wool and blue fur on leather in nice looking patterns.

History: Born and raised in the southern water tribe. Was always interested in other cultures but could never travel as her family did not have the means to, she was too young, and she couldn’t protect herself. Those were all the excuses her parents fed her as she asked time and time again if they could go on an exotic vacation to the Earth Kingdom, The Air Temples, and in times of peace even The Fire Nation and the Northern water tribe. Even with the constant begging her requests were always to no avail. So about a month ago she made a deal with her parents. If she agreed to learn to protect herself through bending and learning survival skills, she could go wherever she wanted by herself. Her parents said it was all right, but she had to at least be in the second rank bending academy before she could leave. Daelana thought learning to bend would be a fun, grand adventure in the plot of traveling the world so she can’t wait to start training once she finds a good teacher.

Uhhh...it fits the criteria for how many words you need for each section, but the grammar is worrisome. I have to know you won't RP like this. If you wouldn't mind going back and fixing some of the worse stuff, I'll approve this. You just have some sentences that run on without a break. They could at least use a comma. Some sentences begin with verbs, "makes her a girl..." and "Born and raised...", without a subject appearing later in the sentence. If you fix those things, I'll approve. If another admin comes in and approves though, I won't dispute.

um makes her a girl is not valid as lbs is an abreviation which does not end the sentence and does not in turn make the sentence start with a verb. No offence intended.

The sentence should still be, "She is 5' even...which makes her a girl of very small stature..."

Sorry about the grammar, I was just really rushed. but fixed

This is acceptable. Approved, be sure to fill the character description that can be found on your profile.